Woosh,crash,bang the gold mine ride carriage felt like it was going out of control. It looked like it had real gold all over the tunnel, but it was fake gold. It was wobbling so much it felt like it was going to come off the track. It was pretty freaky. Then finally it went all calm. Someone said "look out!" I was wondering what he meant by look out, but I didn't even have time to think about it. Zoom it went down a hill at lightning speed. "Ah', I screamed .Crash it hit the end and I hit my chin on the bar. Ow I said because it hurt. phew it's over I said to my Nana. I took a breath of realief. When the ride was over,that was a very fun ride I said.
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Julie
2/27/2015 04:25:40 am
Well done Hunter that sounded exciting but scary too - great writing!
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Miss Mackay
3/18/2015 07:10:44 pm
Great writing Hunter! I love your use of onomatopoeia 'woosh, bang, crash, ow.' Keep up the great writing!
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Hayley Rodgers
5/1/2015 06:12:56 pm
Cool story Hunter! Nan and Pop had a great day taking you and Linc to Rainbows End. I can't wait to hear your next story about our family's visit there and your awesome experiences you had that day! Freaky fun!!! Keep up the great writing buddy :)
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